I am a wolf
I adapt to my environment
Quickly changing my emotions
I am always chasing after my dreams
I don't stop until i catch it
At times I can be stubborn
And attack visciously to get my way
But sometimes I am wrong and lose the scuffle
Always listening for the call of my pack
When called I rush to them,
lending a helpful hand
loyal to until my death
Everyday at night
I look up to the sky
And howl my thanks and praise to God for keeping us safe
I am a wolf
and I never give up
Zach here,
ReplyDeleteBryson, you have done a splendid job at describing detail, nouns, and adjectives. You definetly know your personality well to place it into your metaphoric poem, and make it work. This is fantastic, truly matches your character, and fits the benchmarks for the rubrics and your standards. I cannot find anything else for you to improve on.
Good luck in future assignments, as well as incorporating this into the video.
Godspeed,
Zach
It's a great poem but I think you could use a little tweaking.
ReplyDeleteMaybe reword some lines. For example instead of using the
words "don't" and "catch" in line 5, you could change it to
"won't" and "reach." And in line 12, you could take out the
word "to." Also in line 13, instead of saying "Everyday at night"
you could change it to "Every night." These are just suggestions.
Other than that I really like your poem, I can see the connection
between you and your metaphor and I can also see the
characteristic traits from a wolf to you. Good job :D
-Kristen Tomimbang
Hi Bryson,
ReplyDeleteI agree with your teammates...this metaphor poem is really well done. The images work well with the description of the wolf and its pack.
I agree with some of the suggestions that Kristen makes...I think they're mostly editing kinds of thing...not sure about the won't and reach, as I can see the connection between "chase" and "catch" and the metaphor of a wolf.
How are you going to manage the video???
mrs s
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